Re: OT for Ally - Just finished reading Episode 16

"BrritSki" <BrritSki@xxxxxxxxx> wrote in message news:8s6mo7Fm5kU1@xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx
On 17/02/2011 23:35, a l l y wrote:
"Dr Nick" <3-nospam@xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx> wrote in message
news:877hcyz69n.fsf@xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx
"a l l y" <ally@xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx> writes:

"Axlegrease" <nellie@xxxxxxxxxxxxxxx> wrote in message
news:ijjh01$cga$1@xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx
Ally, I've just spent an hour catching up on the last 5 episodes and
wanted to post some feedback because I know how encouraging it is
when you get a positive response.

It's great. I'm totally intrigued so you have to keep going!

Ooh thanks! I do appreciate comments, particularly nice ones like
this. :-)
There may be a slight interregnum over the weekend as I'm going to be
rather busy, but fear not, the kids will be back!

I'm still enjoying it as well. I only have 9 RSS feeds and you're one
of them - consider yourself in very exalted company.
--
Ooh, excellent! Who are the others then? (One likes to know with whom
one is rubbing virtual shoulders.)

I'm enjoying it too and want to know what happens.

How old are these kids supposed to be though ? I would certainly have built a sledge when I was 11 or so, but not sure I would have talked about "seasoned hardwood". Or "estivation". In other words the language seems a bit adult occasionally for kids of the age I imagined them to be.
I would also avoid references to very modern ephemera like Skype or Gorrillapod (iirc the name of the camera grip) as they will date the writing very quickly.

These are very minor nit-picks though.

I do tend to forget myself at times! And I need reminding. :-) If I ever get this thing finished and try to get it published, there will be quite a lot of editing and rewriting to be done. I'm actually aware of things like Skype etc having to be changed. I think I'm trying to make it absolutely in the 'now' as I write, but realise that if it ever ends up on paper, such things will have to be a bit more general. Besides, I can't go advertising things in a printed book.

My big worry is that I'll forget who said what to whom, when and where, as the story progresses, and start making mistakes. Although I know more or less what's going to happen, I haven't got many notes, so it's all a bit 'flying by the seat of one's pants'.

The choice of the present tense however... ;)

:-)

ally

.

Relevant Pages

  • Re: OT for Ally - Just finished reading Episode 16
    ... wanted to post some feedback because I know how encouraging it is ... when you get a positive response. ... Ooh, excellent! ... How old are these kids supposed to be though? ...
    (uk.media.radio.archers)
  • Re: Spinning
    ... They were talking about Skype today on Working Lunch on BBC2. ... watery looking excuse for a sun at the this precise moment!! ... Well any sun ... >> remember correctly you have university kids??? ...
    (rec.crafts.textiles.yarn)
  • Re: McCoy Poll
    ... I was hanging out with the cool kids in rec.arts.drwho when ... Dburns2006-C got out a spraycan and scrawled the following: ... Ooh, that's a good 'un. ...
    (rec.arts.drwho)
  • Re: OT: Messaging
    ... I was referring to sitting here at my desk chatting to the kids whilst ... But that part of Skype still works for you, ...
    (uk.rec.motorcycles)
  • Re: Skype In
    ... Download Skype and run the installer like any other program. ... To check this click on the Skype interface: ... Skype Out - Connects Skype to any telephone or cellphone on the planet ... There are lots of kids, or cops/FBI agents posing as kids on Skype Me! ...
    (rec.boats.cruising)