Re: new song. please critique

I highly recommend A Wolf at the Table, by: Augusten Burroughs, but
seriously. When you're bleeding from a main artery like that who am I
to to try to direct the color and consistency of the blood. I love
songs that are direct from the heart, I think thats what we are all
striving for, but we write just to say we did. I would say 99 out of
100 songs are just an attempt to avoid dead air, but it is by this act
we occasionally spew forth something with substance. I have always
said I am nothing but a vessel, but so is a douche bag.

On Jun 28, 12:34 am, gretsch27 <Gretsc...@xxxxxxxxx> wrote:
I wrote this song about my dad. He left my mom and my brother last
month. I'm not trying to be whiny emo, so please spare me that one
post i always get about how you hate emo.  i'm looking for some honest
feedback on the song. The vocals are produced a bit strange. I just
kind of threw some eqs and stuff on there and ran out the door. I'm
going to remix the vocals later. I just wanted to get it down.

please listen atwww.wpi.edu/~tomservo/runaway.mp3

i'm trying to be what you wanted
i'm keeping it up but its crashing back down

i know that you can't understand it
you're listening now, but there's nothing to say
and i'm fading out on you
and i don't know what to do

cuz its everything to me
yeah its everything to me
and its up to you to piss it all away
right now

you finally got what you wanted
22 years and a telephone call

i finally see who you are now
and now that i know, i feel nothing at all
and you don't know what to do
when its crashing down on you

and i guess you don't remember
the things you couldn't say
but i wish it could be better
just the same

and you say that i'm to blame
i guess some things never change
but you don't know what to do
when its crashing down on you

and its everything to me
yeah its everything to me
and i'm not sorry
but i feel sorry
for you

.

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