Re: Lyrics Only - Stuck in a Fish Tank
- From: "Kenny" <cazare@xxxxxxxxx>
- Date: Thu, 1 Sep 2005 17:28:20 -0400
Thanks for the comments. It's nice to get feedback from people with
experience at melodic compositions. I did use a little too much I's in this
song. I guess that's because I was trying to wirte about situations I get
myself into using allegorical and satirical imagery. I'll have to rething
how to get across these ideas. Oops there I go again with to many I's.
"Kenny" <cazare@xxxxxxxxx> wrote in message
news:tfOdnWba-vobbpTeRVn-sg@xxxxxxxxxxxxxx
> Here is some more lyrics I came up with. Any comments
>
> STUCK IN A FISH TANK
>
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> Stuck in a fish tank
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> swimming with the sharks
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> heading for the bubbles
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> trying to throw them off the mark
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> moving thru a world
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> with a bright neon glow
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> looking for my ship to come in
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> but the journey is so slow
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> Stuck in a fish tank
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> near a treasure chest
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> another sunken ship
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> that will put me to the test
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> searching thru the waters
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> and sifting thru the sands
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> looking for a pearl
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> but only finding clams
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> I'm stuck in a fish tank
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> swimming with the sharks
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> I'll keep heading for the bubbles
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> trying to throw them off the mark
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> I was getting near the surface
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> I was coming up for air
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> I was losing all my innocence
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> and no one seemed to care
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> just another casualty
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> a victim of reality
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> searching for another way
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> to make it thru another day
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> Stuck in a fish tank
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>
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