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• Re: CRIT: First attempt query letter -- Third go at it
  ... Astronomy grad student Jack Mueller has intercepted an interstellar message ... an asteroid deflection system located in Australia's Outback. ... Becky Waggoner, and Australia is 7000 miles away. ... As Earth and the asteroid ...
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• Re: CRIT: Second go on 2-page synopsis for Message Received.
  ... his thesis advisor, Professor Watkins," I assume everyone on earth with the right basic equipment will get this message at the same time, so you might mention that Jack and Prof Watkins are testing Jack's demodulation protocol, or whatever makes their approach unique. ... The agents also try to kidnap Jack at Becky's apartment, but, with the aid of Becky's roommate, law student Ginger Chin, and a pair of Berkeley defensive linemen who live next door, Jack and Becky escape. ... In the U.S., Vice Admiral William Powell, who served in the Navy with Rick Waggoner, explains to him that the kidnapping attempts are a result of bureaucratic miscommunication and overzealousness. ...
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• CRIT: Second go on 2-page synopsis for Message Received.
  ... ten-mile diameter asteroid 140 miles away, which is where Jack, Becky and Rick ... that also indicate that there is an asteroid deflection system in place around ... the Earth already. ...
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• Re: CRIT: First attempt query letter -- Third go at it
  ... The first paragraph was basically the set-up. ... As Earth and the asteroid hurtle ... Jack and Becky huddle against the early morning cold in an arbor of the Berkeley campus. ...
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• Re: CRIT: First attempt query letter -- Second go at it
  ... Astronomy grad student Jack Mueller has intercepted an interstellar ... an asteroid deflection system located in Australia's Outback. ... As Earth and the ... With the reader, you're trying to get him intrigued with the plot, ...
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