Re: How about "The door un-dilated" moments?

On Sat, 30 Jun 2007 04:32:14 GMT, "Mike Schilling"
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"Lawrence Watt-Evans" <lwe@xxxxxxx> wrote in message
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On Sat, 30 Jun 2007 02:15:03 GMT, ted@xxxxxxxxxxxxxxx (Ted Nolan
<tednolan>) wrote:

Then during all that , the door un-dialates: The husband has devised a
plan to rescue his wife, but can't carry it out yet. He sits down,
paces, tries to read the paper etc, finally deciding to take in a new
comedy show his peers have told him is really funny. VV is
giving the character's sort of highbrow-snob reaction to the show and
suddenly mentions that it's on the _radio_. It's a real monkey-wrench
momement that completely throws you out of the weird flow...

Arcadia Darrell's homework scene did that to me in the Foundation
Trilogy. "Intrissassies"?

Would you have liked a Vancian-style footnote explaining what the actual
word was in Galactic Standard and exactly how Arkady had mispronounced it?

Oh, it wasn't just the one word. That whole scene felt entirely too
familiar -- the only exotic element was the voicewriter, while
everything else, from the word to the sash windows, was
twentieth-century American.




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