Re: Ah yes, the infodump problem
- From: Nicky <nicky.matthews@xxxxxxxxxxxxxx>
- Date: Tue, 2 Sep 2008 11:27:43 -0700 (PDT)
On Sep 2, 7:22 pm, David Friedman <d...@xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx>
wrote:
In articleI'd probably do the same - expand the summary to include a bit of
<1imm1c4.1bb5fly440be0N%green_kni...@xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx>,
green_kni...@xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx (Catja Pafort) wrote:
This is timely, and I thought I'd ask for your strategies - it ties in
with a discussion of David F's lecture that's buried in a longer thread..
I have a conversation between two characters which facilitates bonding.
Somewhat. It absolutely has to take place, but right now I have a
placeholder of
They talked about Farree over lunch, the sights Farilin and Alyk had
seen, although she left out their sojourn into harbourmastery; the roads
Ilyakis had travelled. It was a companionable meal, and did much to heal
the rift between them. Ilyakis carefully steered around any question of
what he had _done_ on his journey, and given they were in a public
place, Farilin refrained from asking.
And I am happy to leave it like this. On the other hand, I might use
this scene to _show_ the arc - they're still somewhat wary around each
other (the Wise Mentor has just returned from a journey to find his
student coping pretty well on her own), and it would be neat to
illustrate that arc over lunch.
Only I don't know how I would achieve that. If I try to write down what
happened, it will be Yet Another Talking Heads Conversation in a tavern..
What they're saying - at least what I can imagine them saying - isn't
particularly relevant, but if I could find a way, I'd like to show the
process of bonding a bit better, to make it more plausible; and I'd like
to start out with a touch more wariness on both sides. This *could* be
one of Farilin's challenges, to convince Ilyakis that she's trustworthy
and deserving of the next level, but it's going to happen fairly quicly
(over a day) in a number of mostly innocent scenes, so one of my
problems is how I can illustrate the relationship between them without
saying outright how Farilin feels/reads his responses - I want to make
this more immediate.
Any ideas or strategies?
It isn't much of a strategy, but I would be inclined to have a little of
the conversation, used to do what you want to do, and either summarize
or imply the rest.
interesting detail - focus on the protags in the moment for a snatch
of conversation - a look, a comfortable silence and then pull out
again and move on.
Nicky
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