Re: How to delay a moving van?

On 2008-01-06, Dorothy J Heydt penned:

Oh, I like that. As a first step, anyway. Switched clipboards.
The driver gets into the cab, revs up the engine, looks again at the
clipboard, and says "Wait, they said 'Anchorage,' that can't be
right, this says 'Highland Park.'" And he was born and brought up
in Jacksonville, and he KNOWS there's a Highland Park in Florida....

This would really bother me. It wold be awfully easy for him at this
point to just go back and *ask* someone to double-check. Even if the
information available is incomplete, there would be contact
information for the client. I suppose there are still five people or
so who don't have cell phones that could be used while travelling
across the country, but even so she could leave the contact
information of a friend or family member she trusts.

For me to buy this story line, the driver would have to either not
notice any problem or have something going on that would absolutely
prevent him from asking (and the only conditions I can think of that
would do that would be more along the lines of an action/adventure
story, which I don't think you want).



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monique
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