Re: opening, Old Questions
- From: "Dan Goodman" <dsgood@xxxxxxxxxxx>
- Date: 18 May 2007 03:09:09 GMT
Logan Kearsley wrote:
"Dan Goodman" <dsgood@xxxxxxxxxxx> wrote in message
The Antique had a table to himself under the Dome. He could afford
it, and he didn't have either partnership or household.
Makes me think we're talking about an antiques dealer. Am wondering
what the Dome is, but can put off finding out for a while without
being annoyed.
He also didn't have much business. He was drinking tea and reading
the table when he heard someone clear his throat.
You have me intrigued about 'reading the table'. Assuming that this
is not a throwaway, I'll be wanting to know what sort of thing he's
reading and why it's printed (?) on a table, and if perhaps my
initial idea that the table he has to himself is for selling things
is wrong or not.
It's become common for a table's surface to function as a screen.
(Drat -- must remember to give that information.)
Correction -- her throat.
The Antique looked her over. Hair and eyes black, skin pale (and
currently a bit sunburned). Stood as if she was used to being
uncommonly tall (he was poor at estimating height, and couldn't
remember what was normal for women this decade.) Age probably
mid-twenties.
I like the pro-dropping style. Makes it seem more like someone's
thoughts/observations, rather than a narrative exposition.
Also, I'm now wondering if 'The Antique' may refer to the man's age,
rather than or in addition to his business. Actually, I'm pretty sure
that it does, which just leaves open the question of whether or not
he is also an antique dealer, and if not, what business is it that he
doesn't have much of?
It's his age, and what he sells isn't antiques.
"Tom Sweet? I'm Jeanette Vang Winkler, and I'd like to talk about
us working together."
I would keep reading.
Thanks!
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