Re: Internal and External description

In article <1hbh2y4.fq2wwl18rykj7N%usenet@xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx>,
usenet@xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx (Catja Pafort) wrote:

I'd be *really* grateful to see how other people would work the
description into this passage, but so far, no one has taken the bait.


So now, with added door:

As Tulomn had promised, Master Varki's house was easily found. In a
street of drab and dreary buildings

I preferred the first version, myself. With that opening, I might well
have kept reading--but not with this.

But then, I'm probably far out on the tail of the relevant distribution.

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