Re: More slushpile sentences

In article <1x7nqdd59wor1.ape7z0li9y6t$.dlg@xxxxxxxxxx>, Brian M. Scott
<b.scott@xxxxxxxxxxx> writes
>On Mon, 9 Jan 2006 12:27:06 +0000, Helen Hall
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>> However, fortunately for Catja one of the replies was
>> right on the button. Chap called Rich, Rob? Something
>> like that.
>
>Rick Robinson.

Thanks. I was writing from memory and didn't have time to go back to the
crit which I'd read the day before.

>I completely agree with him about 'Ishtar'.
>The rest of his comments could be summed up as 'your
>synopsis tells us what happens but not what's going on',
>which does seem to me to be a fair criticism.

Yes, the reader needed to know why any of this mattered.

Helen

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