Re: cugor
- From: George Dance <georgedance04@xxxxxxxx>
- Date: Thu, 19 Jul 2007 08:09:49 -0700
On Jul 11, 2:41 am, david2sa...@xxxxxxxxx wrote:
my mistress left her scent
on this stone shaped like a heart
as hard as the iron she wants to protect
to hold and to have many times more
i am a cop i wear the suit carry the gun
i avoid the smile but this morning a fleet
of horny cats sniff-trail me to the tea-shop
where even here the stone makes a waiter
drop a pot into the ministers' lap
i laugh and pretend it was in response
to a joke told at the table but the bad guys
were tipped off by cats and soon i had three walls
pierced by the gaze of a lost endgame
my mistress has other stones
some to protect a heart from the spew of fire
just under the chest wall when an arrest
goes bad -- that stone she kisses to a power
so sublime i need not eat for weeks
Ah .. I just found this and figured it was what you'd 'appreciate
comments' for. As the other guy said, it's powerful. I really like
the voice here, reminds me a bit of what I remember of Mickey
Spillane.
The only probem I had with it was with the name. 'Cugor' made me think
of 'Cujo,' which made me think of a cartoon private eye dog - which
the references to 'my mistress' and the antagonistic 'cats' only
reinforced. That may be only a problem for this reader, but you may
wish to take it into account.
.
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