Re: Long Sentence Help

On Apr 10, 5:56 am, Todd <burns...@xxxxxxx> wrote:
As I often see sentences beginning with "this," I was thinking about
parsing the following, rather long sentence into two, and starting the
second with "this." So I was wondering what people here think of using
"this" to start a sentence, or if they would rewrite the sentence some
other way.

1. "These factors, coupled with the failure to recognize that the age
of a theory and the number of authorities supporting it cannot make it
true, allowed the geocentric theory of the solar system to survive for
centuries, in some circles even after experiments conclusively showed
otherwise, to a large extent because the notion of a heliocentric
solar system severely threatened a world view that many people had
been psychologically, emotionally, professionally and religiously
vested in for ages."

2. "These factors, coupled with the failure to recognize that the age
of a theory and the number of authorities supporting it cannot make it
true, allowed the geocentric theory of the solar system to survive for
centuries, in some circles even after experiments conclusively showed
otherwise. This to a large extent because the notion of a heliocentric
solar system severely threatened a world view that many people had
been psychologically, emotionally, professionally and religiously
vested in for ages.

Thanks for the advice

These factors kept the geocentric theory of the solar system alive, as
did a fallacious reliance on tradition, and the heliocentric theory's
threat to a world view that many people were emotionally,
professionally, and religiously attached to. Combined, they kept it
alive for centuries, even after observations had refuted it.

--
Jerry Friedman

.

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