Re: Can you check it please if it is correct?

"TTTomek" <tomolder28@xxxxxxxxx> wrote in message
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I would appreciate it very much if you could comment on any sentence
that is incorrect or seems to be badly written.

Of course you can skip the words associated with steel products as I
understand that they are not widely known.

ZIZIX has been present on the steel market since 1989. During all the

"On the market" is used mainly to describe the availabiity
of shares in the stock market. "In the market" mainly means either
(1) Zizix Corp. sells steel products, or
(2) Zizix Corp. actively buys and sells shares in other steel companies.

years the company has proved to be one of the valued companies, ensuring
our customers not only of professional and reliable services but also
that all the delivered products have quality certificates of noted
steel manufacturers and are delivered on time.

Another point worth mentioning and widely appreciated by buyers, is a
wide range of metallurgic products offered by the company, including:

- wire rods
- hot rolled bars; ribbed, round plain, flat and square
- hot rolled sections
- cold formed profiles
- cold and hot rolled sheets
- galvanized sheets and trapezoidal sheets
- welded and seamless tubes

To satisfy our customers even more, the offer was enriched with
stainless steel, acidproof steel, bronze, aluminium and such services as
cutting and logistics of all the products bought in the company.

Trying to attune to the market needs the company also offers flexibility
when price negotiations are involved and special price discounts for
regular buyers.

Among other wholesale companies ZIZIX is widely acclaimed. The company
also enhanced its prestige by being a member of Polska Unia
Dystrybutorow Stali, an association of Polish companies dealing with
steel, with headquarters in Warsaw.

The secret of the companyâ??s success is predominantly attained by great
involvement, organization skills and consistent pursuit of business
development.

(Except for the last para. which is almost meaningless)
this language looks OK but we do not know to what
readers the text is directed. Are you trying to sell more
steel products or shares in Zizix or something else?

--
Don Phillipson
Carlsbad Springs
(Ottawa, Canada)


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